Can We Make JP 4

SSJDinoTycoon42 · Post by **SSJDinoTycoon42** » 01 Sep 2005, 18:27

all right, here's my version. took yours and altered it

The Edge of Chaos / Jurassic Park IV: The Edge of Chaos / The Edge of Chaos: Jurassic Park

A small village in southwestern Costa Rica, The village men are all busy working on there daily task, as the camera moves into a small hut, a small group of women are huddled around a project (project will be determined after research). The women seem frantically worried about some thing. A light-skinned man led by a young local approaches the hut. He sticks out like a sore thumb and you can tell that he’s not from around here. (Determine a name for the character as well as wardrobe) He begins to question the women about the recent events. They begin to talk revealing what they are so timid about. The guide acts as a translator to tell the man what has transpired here.

”A series of attacks on children and small animals have been reported by neighboring villages.”

The women seem to be agitated greatly by this.

“The women say that children will go out late in the evenings and are heard screaming in the woods. When they are found they have small bites all over there body and become very ill. Along with these attacks people have also come up missing, grown men and women, boys and girls, pets. People will just go off into the jungle and never come back!”

::cut to jungle::

A group of young children is found playing on the outskirts of the village, at the edge of the dense jungle around them. The kids look to be playing a game of hide and seek, they aren’t scared of the jungle as of now but they know not to go to far from the village because of their elder’s warnings of evil spirits and animals in the jungle. : The kids all disperse to there hiding places in the woods:
:The camera follows one young boy as he passes a pair of girls, The girls turn as he walks by warning him not to go to much further into the jungle. The young boy shrugs them off as he is walking through the dense foliage, (you get the sense that he is exploring more than he is hiding)

::cut back to village::

“Along with theses missing people and periodic attacks large lizards have also been reported, never alive though; only their dead carcasses are found. But these monsters are thought of as a bad omen and there presence is not to be taken likely, these creatures are referred to as the ‘hupia’ Kidnappers that still babies at night. The villagers fear that these monsters will bring them harm and that they are the work of evil spirits.”

::cut back to hide and seek::

:The camera follows him as he walks seeing what he sees and hearing what he hears: A small rustle of leaves startles the boy but it’s just a small mammal a monkey or some kind of squirrel, He walks a bit further and finds a good hiding spot in a ditch below a tree. You can hear the faint sounds of the village not to far off. Then there is another sound a light chirp from above, just over the crest of the ditch and then there is another chirp from the other side. :The camera watches the boy as he listens to the noises wondering what they are. Then the camera pans down and we realize that he has stepped onto some small looking bird like eggs and broken a few, the yolks spilling to the ground, the boy does not realize this: The boy listens intently as the chirps become more erratic, It seems as if the chirps are growing in number and they sound agitated and excited.
The little boy looks up to see two small lizards (compies) looking down at him hissing, the boy is startled and begins to scream.

::cut back to village::

In the village the shouts and screams of the boy can be heard, local men run into the jungle, The camera follows them threw the foliage. The man follows them as more men join behind him.

::cut to the boy::

The screams change to a quiet whimper as he begins to sob and cry, he scrambles up the hillside working his way out of the ditch,: The camera follows the boy up the side of the ditch from behind him, the camera ends up looking between his legs at multiple compies: The boy then is bitten twice in the leg. He yells at the compies, as they jump on to his body in an aggressive manner. : The camera sees the boys feet stumbling back and fourth, compies fall to the ground, there jaws and snouts covered in blood, only to jump right back up again and leap into the air.

Then there is a view of the men as they come to see the boy lying on the ground covered in green lizards, he’s still screaming loudly. The men pause, then instantly they begin to yank the small reptiles off the boy hurling them through the jungle.

::cut to next scene::

A young man with a ball cap on sits in a hotel room watching the news half heatedly while reading a book on small dinosaurs, the news is in Spanish, The young man hears of the incident and pays very close attention. Looking away from his book he sets it down and begins writing down what the news has said. : Camera pans up at his face, He’s young about 23 to 25 years old a look of intense interest is on his face He has a scraggily dark beard and blue eyes: The man slaps the note book down and picks up a cell phone.

The Hotel room door opens…

Gutierrez: Richard…I’ve got another one
Levine: Yeah I was just about to call you (sets phone down and shakes his head)It’s sad…
Gutierrez: Sad?!… This is great!
Levine: It’s never great when it happens to a child
Gutierrez: a child?
Levine: yeah, one of our compies just got a little boy
Gutierrez: Oh no, is he all right?
Levine: They said he was in critical condition
Gutierrez: Where did it happen?
Levine: just east of Golfito today. In a small village called uh... (Refers to his notes on the news) Selva Verde
Gutierrez: Really?
Levine: Yes, but villagers killed some of the small lizards and kept them
Gutierrez: Good that gives us a specimen to look at.
Levine: Not if we don’t get down there before the government does
Gutierrez: Well that will have to wait because I have something that will blow your mind.
Levine: what’s that?
Gutierrez: They found another one…
Levine: ……a big one? (In a clam, serious manner)
Gutierrez: Yep, and actually it’s close by the area of that attack, it’s about twenty miles south of Golfito
Levine: When are we leaving?
Gutierrez: Now (pulls out a cell phone)…
: Gutierrez leaves the room Levine begins to gather items:

: A helicopter is seen flying along the coastline as the sun is setting, Levine and Gutierrez are inside:

Levine: how’d you hear about this?
Gutierrez: I know people
Levine: No really?
Gutierrez: Well I’ve got a small lab in Golfito and some students working there tipped me off
Levine: They found this?
Gutierrez: Yep… and they haven’t told a soul, so we should be-
(cutting in)
Levine: How will they keep people from finding out?
Gutierrez: Golfito sits just above an animal refuge, The animal was found on a beach within the refuge
Levine: Oh… do they know about the incident in Selva Verde
Gutierrez: Yep, I have a student on his way now to pick up a specimen.. Ah (smiles) there’s Golfito…. almost there! Selva Verde sits on the northern end of the refuge in fact-
Levine: (in a bewildered voice) it’s strange how they’re attacking… small animals like this are usually scavengers
Gutierrez: Yes and I still believe they are… they’re just territorial and they’re protecting there territory, your right though it is strange how they are acting.
Levine: Yes they are aggressive almost like birds but they attack in packs.
Gutierrez: a lot like birds actually…
Levine: I think this specimen will definitely give us an upper hand in letting the world know that Costa Rica has a problem
Gutierrez: (in a whisper) Whoa…
(a large shape is seen lying on the beach, its about 20 feet in length and near the edge of the trees)
Levine: Whoa… it’s huge…
: Camera shows helicopter landing and Levine jumping out and running toward the animal)

Levine: (laughing) I can’t believe this…
Gutierrez: Wait up…
(Both men get to within 10 feet of the animal and are immediately halted by the smell of rotting flesh and decay. Small animals scurry away as they close in, but the carcass is covered in large flies. Levine begins to snap pictures)

Gutierrez: Whew we this thing reeks….
Levine: Yes it’s had to have been out here more than a day or so
Gutierrez: Well… what do you think it is?
Levine: I dunno… but if I had to guess I would say a large Carnotaurus.
Gutierrez: hmmm?
Levine: Yep, a pure breed of dinosaur just like the compies we’ve been finding.
Gutierrez: how did these things get here, an animal this large would’ve been hard to miss…
Levine: I dunno… The compies I can see… but these animals are way to large…it’s not likely they swam here…

:Levine looks at the specimen closely:
Levine: If an animal this large got off one of those islands I don’t want to think about what else could’ve gotten over here…
Gutierrez: that’s a scary thought… I mean, if there are other animals on the main land… then they could have reproduced and created there own ecosystem by now

:Various shots of Gutierrez and Levine analyzing the species, both men swatting at flies and making a disgusted face:

Levine: Were running out of day light
Gutierrez: right, we’ll need to cover the sight and resume work tomorrow
Levine: well, we’ll need a sample before this thing decays any further…. (Levine pulls out a knife) mind doing the honors?
Gutierrez: (frowning) I guess…. (Starts to cut… then gags)… whew this thing smells awful… how much?
Levine: just a couple from above the thigh or tail… (fidgets with a black brief case looking box with a syringe in side of it)
: As Levine readies the syringe a low thumping sound is heard, It’s the sound of propeller blades)
Levine: What’s that?
Gutierrez: sounds like… a helicopter
Levine: (looks at Gutierrez, and then looks over his shoulder)
:A helicopter bursts out from above the jungle behind them, It swings out over the water and then circles back to land on the beach it is a black huey helicopter:
Levine: Who the hell is that?
Gutierrez: Trouble…
Levine: hurry hide the camera film and samples (Levine hurries to get a blood sample)
Gutierrez: (stuffing the samples into his pockets) Do we protest?
Levine: I wish... just take what we have and go

: Levine and Gutierrez gather their materials and Gutierrez starts to head back to there own helicopter. Levine stays at the site! The government men getting off the helicopter are all wearing masks and one of them has a metal backpack on. The men quickly run toward Levine

Levine: (Yelling at the officials) What do you plan to do with this specimen (a man walks by pushing him to the ground, Levine then sees the man with the metal backpack pull out a long wand another man lights a butane lighter, Levine realizes the men are going to burn the animal)?
Levine: No!! (Levine walks toward the group of men) don’t you realize how important this is? are you out of your mind! (One of the men looks at Levine gesturing that he doesn’t understand English, Levine gets closer to the man and yells) This could be the most amazing find of the 21st century… (Levine closes in on the man gesturing at him, The man then punches Levine in the stomach, and Levine shuts up quickly gasping for air)
Agent 1 pulls a small 22 pistol out of his over coat
Agent1: get the hell outta here.
The backpack agent begins to burn the carcass
Levine: Yes S- (coughs) sir
Gutierrez: (seeing his friend in trouble he runs over to help up Levine) are you ok?
(The government official has re-concealed his weapon and moved away)
Levine: Yeah (Coughs hard as he regains his breath… They head back to the helicopter)
Agent1: Hey buddy… you left your camera (lightly tosses the camera on to the carcass as they continue to burn it)

: Levine and Gutierrez climb back onto their helicopter:
(Helicopter pilot yells at Gutierrez in Spanish, saying he should’ve left them and they could’ve all been killed.)
The helicopter lifts off.
(Levine and Gutierrez watch the agents as they fly away from them, remaining in sight until the shore disappears from view)
Levine: I wonder why they didn’t question us
Gutierrez: Just count your blessings, you’re lucky to be alive-
Levine: Tell me about it
Gutierrez: It’s a good thing they weren’t more thorough. They assumed all the evidence was in your camera…

: Helicopter flies away:
:cut to the next scene

***Include maybe 1 or 2 more scenes in this space. scenes without action, just setting up the story (I can’t because I don’t know the big picture)***

Dodgson…

A jungle canopy flashes by the camera at a high rate of speed, camera lifts up so that you see a plane flying above the trees. The plane then flies out over an open field. The camera slows but follows the plane as it proceeds forward.

:Cockpit:

: A man is seen with head set on and sunglasses, his hair is thinning and he looks middle aged. The man has thin lips and looks uptight; he is thin and is warring a blue polo shirt. Suddenly a look of happiness and glee come over his face as he leans forward:

Dodgson: What’d I tell ya, huh? Just look at ‘em, (laughter is heard in the cockpit, a voice is heard gasping another says wow!)

: Camera is looking through the plane window at a river with large herbivores around it; the next shot shows Dodgson turning around grinning “isn’t that amazing?”
Another man is shown, heavy set and he is lightly sweating. He is warring a Hawaiian button up shirt and is pulling his shades down to get a better view.

Dodgson: Well? I mean aren’t they huge?
Baselton: (in a monotone far away dazed voice) Yes….
Dodgson: Hey, King…feeling better?

: King is shown leaning against the side of the cockpit sweating heavily and looking pretty sick. He is wearing a blue polo shirt like Dodgson and a baseball cap.

King: (mumbles) I hate flying (as he peers through the window) (excitedly) Jesus (His eyes light up and a look of terror comes over his face)

: Camera is looking down at the field through the plane window as an Ceratosaurus lunges from the edge of the woods and attacks a small Maiasaur. The Camera is then down by the attack as the Ceratosaurus slams the body to the ground, and takes a quick bite out of the smaller dinosaur. As the plane flies by overhead we see the Ceratosaur look up as if wondering what the plane was (a low growl from the Cera):

Dodgson: Incredible...isn’t it?
Baselton: (same tone as before) Yes…
King: Just land this damn thing so we can see this so called laboratory you’re talking about.
Dodgson: almost there
King: I’ don’t feel too good…

: Camera shows the plane flies over head and then touch down on an isolated un-kept runway, The plane is shown taxing:

Dodgson: (sarcastically) another successful mission!
King: This area is protected right?
Dodgson: Yes it has electric fences around the compound
Baselton: You already have two guys here right?
Dodgson: Yes there here, there’s their plane.
: Camera shows Baselton squinting to see:
Baselton: Where?
Dodgson: under that canopy over there, it’s camouflaged
Baselton: O’, why?
Dodgson: Because what were doing is considered Illegal
King: What? (Suddenly more aware of what was going on) You never said any of this was illegal in our meeting with Dr. Benson!
Dodgson: That’s cuz he already knew
Baselton: (Leaning forward) It’s only illegal if you get caught
Dodgson: exactly

: Camera shows the plane coming to a stop and a door automatically opens turning into a stair case, Baselton exits first, gingerly navigating the narrow steps, He is followed by a smiling Dodgson who looks very excited, then King emerges belching as he gets to the bottom of the stairs, making an awful face:

chase · Post by **chase** » 01 Sep 2005, 18:28

no it's flying above the trees...
and the reason i used the T-rex is because the main Carnivore in my scrit isn't going to be the rex or the raptor. but since the rex is such a great dino he will have a significant part. Allo or Cerato suars sound great I just wanted it to be a large Predator. It could be spino but he is very mithological looking right now i dunno! I don't like Spino.

O and the Dino Im going to use is Carnotaurus

I like the idea of stealth

We shall see what happens
I look forward to reading your script!!

SSJDinoTycoon42 · Post by **SSJDinoTycoon42** » 01 Sep 2005, 18:31

i posted my altered version of yours..i wasn't sure if you wanted me to use yours as a base to start from scratch or just take yours and change it. if you want me to make a completely new one i can do that too if you want.

chase · Post by **chase** » 01 Sep 2005, 18:57

I read the script it looks good...

*I like The changes you made with the government offical... But I would like him to put Levine down in a way before he tossed the camera into the fire*

What do you think about the Carnotaurus being the main predator of the story?

I also Re wrote mine and it is edited in the above post take a look... i think we went in the same direction with the opening scene...

I like that i dea though I had just not been able to incorperate it be cause of my computer....

I do like that Idea though.....

What do you think about compiling scenes of injured people and of people crying as if they have lost something?

Check it out...

Any way heres where im wanting to go with this thing.. im wanting Dodgson to be messing around with this lab that he has been able to gather up electricity for and to be gathering data files and other things from the electrical computers there at site b....

The team on the Island thinks that there are no dinos with in the electrified fences. They are wrong
They are stalked by something, something smart, something invisible.. (not really invisible)

Mean while levine and Guitierrez find and consult Malcom (or grant or sombody who can help) and determine what spiecies they have found.

I also want dodgson to be a (sp) kaniving (sp) lier who has his own plans. he will manipulate any situation to be on top. (he to will die)

some how the two places will need to be tied together...

Im not sure but im leaning into it!

SSJDinoTycoon42 · Post by **SSJDinoTycoon42** » 01 Sep 2005, 20:07

hmm...well, how about he says something like "Find a new hobby" if not i'll try to think of something else

yeah, it's a little similar to yours, but i used their description of the events to the "light-skinned man" to add dramatic effect to what was going on in the woods. that way the audience relates the stories to the hide and seek. you know like, they talk about children etc. dissapearing; we see children going off into the woods. we hear about lizards in the Jungle; we see compies. he screams, and we hear it in the village. then it leads right up to them finding the boy. the way i did it works out just right for suspense and dramatic effect. at least in my opinion, then again, i wrote it.

i read yours before i posted it, but the scenes you changed were the same ones i changed and your changes didn't really affect mine, so i posted my version after 1 or 2 more changes.

we could probably put a few shots as the light-skinned man walks by the villagers with losses(if you agree to having the light-skinned man in there...we gotta find a name for him though /biggrin.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":D" border="0" alt="biggrin.gif" /> )

that's a pretty good idea. i could probably think up some scenes for it. but if you can think of them that would be good and then i can see if i can make it even better(i'm sure your ideas will be great anyway). Carnotaurus (camoflogue version) is a really good dinosaur to use. it's mysterious, dangerous, menacing, scary, cool; all the things a new main carnivore should be(i guess). it's also a good way to bring back Grant and Malcolm. i've heard/read that a lot of people are leaning towards bringing to the mainland(in a creative way...no Godzillas here /biggrin.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":D" border="0" alt="biggrin.gif" /> ) so if we can get off the island it would make for an interesting turn and people won't call it cliche(you know...trapped on an island again and such) you just have to make it very good, you know, not just people running away scared.

i dunno if i'll have time to write scenes though, cuz schools starting soon.

chase · Post by **chase** » 01 Sep 2005, 22:26

Yes Im in school as well..

I dunno how to go about getting the carno's over except for some one like Dodgson was transporting them when they had an accident and some of the dinos got away,..
Also, maybe the carno's were so smart that they new in order to migrate they would have to conceal them selves on a ship to get back to the main land. Like the Raptors were trying to migrate in the Jp book scene at the end!

I like the Carno's because they are new and you can do alot with them, It should be Kept on the "low" If you know what I mean I want them to be a surprise like some thing totally unexpected. I wan't every one in the audience to think that the stalking dinos are Raptors but when the Carno reveals it's self it will be some thing totally new and amazing...

SSJDinoTycoon42 · Post by **SSJDinoTycoon42** » 02 Sep 2005, 00:12

hmmm...have you set up a reason why the dinosaurs are on the mainland like plot wise? i mean like are you planning to have the later scenes on the mainland and using those carcasses as suspense builders leading to them going to the island, realizing how dinosaurs escaped, and then having the climactic action on the mainland? i dunno just wonderin if that's why they were there. sorry, i lost my train of thought while i was writing that, so i dunno if it makes sense.

definitely a surprise, especially if you don't allow any Carnataurus footage in the trailers

nissin · Post by **nissin** » 04 Sep 2005, 18:52

Wow..., you guys sure did get up to a lot of planning in like what...? 3 days!?
So anyway, good changes to the script..., now, I know I might be skipping ahead maybe too far..., but has anyone tried visualising these scenes?

SSJDinoTycoon42 · Post by **SSJDinoTycoon42** » 04 Sep 2005, 20:32

well, that's the point of the script isn't it? /tongue.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":P" border="0" alt="tongue.gif" /> there you can visualize what it looks like /biggrin.gif" style="vertical-align:middle" emoid=":D" border="0" alt="biggrin.gif" />

if you're talking about storyboards or actually filming then no and most likely we never will(filming)

nissin · Post by **nissin** » 04 Sep 2005, 20:38

Well, I was visualising in terms of both filming AND scenes...
So far, somethings have turned out great, but a couple of scenes/charcters still don't look/sound so... good...
We're making good progress alright, and who knows..., we might even get around to selling this idea to universal studios... LOL!
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